Jack Frost

theres some nice lines but overall it does lack some imagery to help your ideas flourish. Still, the lines, "Yet we worship hate and Pray for death Under the guise ...

A very well written piece. Thoroughly enjoyed the images created and the way it flowed was faultless. One small thing that perhaps I didn’t think fitted was the contrast in ...

It is nicely written but seems to be a bit confused. At the start you call the sheets 'sordid' which doesn't give the reader the idea of the love that ...

It's a nice piece to read but there are some things that I think could be a bit better. One thing I noticed was that you used quite a few ...